New Storyboard & Shot list.

A high angle shot from the side, mid-close up on the face of a detective who gets a call in the evening, whilst he's relaxing/asleep. Mid-close up of him opening his eyes and answering the call.
"Hello? Another one? I'll be right there" he says.

Black-out with text: "Two hours earlier".

+ A shot of a man staring at the house, extreme close up on his lips taking a drag on a cigarette,extreme close up when cigarette on the floor, trodden on with a black shoe.
+ Cuts to a shot of the dad walking out of his workplace into the car (match-on action).
+ Then cuts right to a close up of shoes walking up the stairs to the house.
+ Next shot of the dad driving the car.
+ Next it cuts to the murderer unlocking the door.
+ Then cuts to a shot of phone calling dad's wife.
+ Quick cut to the murderer unlocking and opening the door from outside (shot inside).
+ Then cuts to the phone ringing.
+ A close up shot of black shoes waking across the foor, slowly.
+ Close up shot of the man pulling out a gun and pointing it at the camera.
+ Cuts to the dad pulling in to the garage - tracking shot + match on action- and walking into the house (midshot/longshot).
+ Extreme close up of the murderer slowly sliding the back door open (match-on action), and close up of him hiding the gun inside his jacket.
+ Cuts to the shot of dad walking into the room only to find dead family on the floor -flashing shots, extreme close ups of faces before seeing dad's shocked and crying face as he walks up to his son, holds him in his arms and we cut to a close up on both.